Here you can find a few of my favorite stories so far. Feel free to comment and leave suggestions!
Storytelling Week 13: Runaway
Storytelling Week 11: The Mystery of the Poptart
Storytelling Week 6: The Game
Storytelling Week 5: The Tree
Storytelling Week 13: Runaway
Storytelling Week 11: The Mystery of the Poptart
Storytelling Week 6: The Game
Storytelling Week 5: The Tree
Brittan- I really enjoyed your tale of The Tree. It is a great choice for your portfolio. There were a few spelling and grammatical errors scattered throughout the story. You may want to go ahead and read through it one more time just to double check everything. The paragraph separation and layout was very good and may the story read smoothly. The content of the story was one of my favorites. After reading your author’s note on the original story I really enjoyed your change to the story. The idea of a home inside a tree is so quaint and original. I do wish that you had somehow incorporated one of the ghosts from the original stories. You could somehow have had him meet up or talk to one of the ghosts. I also liked the aspect of the man’s family coming to look for him although I kind of wish he would have gone and got them. Otherwise I really loved the story. Great job!
ReplyDeleteFirst, on an unrelated note. I really love the layout of your blog! Your background is really cool, unlike anything generic or anything else I’ve seen. In regards to your portfolio! I read your story post from Week Five, The Tree. I really like how in depth your story was! You didn’t rush through it and you took time to outline the details and the importance of the elements in your story. I think your author’s note was also spot on. You commented on the interesting nature of the ghosts being helpful which is a good point! Typically we would imagine ghosts as being something of an inhibitor factor. I think your changes all worked very well in your writings and the Alice in Wonderland bit was seamlessly tied into your version. The blending of the two concepts was a really cool idea and I’m glad you could write it in there.
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ReplyDeleteAs a lover of Pop-Tarts, your title is what caught my eye and instantly made me want to read this story. Also, it really touched me that the Pop-Tart was blueberry and not strawberry. Blueberry Pop-Tarts are my absolute favorite and I feel that they do not get the recognition that they deserve. Now that my rant about Pop-Tarts is over, I must say that I did enjoy your story. I thought that it was cute that the boys conducted their own mini investigation in order to find the Pop-Tart. There is nothing worse than being excited to eat a certain thing all day only to not be able to eat it because something happened. I also liked that you decided to make the Pop-Tart hidden instead of placing the blame on someone. I agree with you that most of the time when you think something is lost and gone forever, it its merely right under your nose.